Rowling and elitists

Robyn Starkey rohina at shaw.ca
Fri Oct 31 18:57:41 EST 2003


>Robyn enjoyed a quick and lethal commentary on someone's style, as provided
>for us by Melissa, and the rest of us enjoyed her enjoyment.

Now you all know how much I love my job. :)

> >>"That I don't hold against her (though she leans over and grabs hold of
> >>the wheel too many times).
> >Comma missing after "That".
>
>Wouldn't it be better style to avoid both the comma and the brackets?  What
>would be wrong with "I don't hold that against her, though she leans over
>and grabs the wheel too many times."?

Yes. This is far more elegant, and the sense of the sentence is clearer. 
The comma I suggested is the minimal change necessary to get the sentence 
to approach correctness. Clarity of style is another whole leap away.

Robyn 
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